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Ponyo by jessieiii

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Critique time~~ ;)

I'll Critique this one,
I Want to critique newer stuff because maybe i will just repeat a part that you've learned how to improve in.

Although i'm not a fan of Ponyo either xD

so lets start~

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Good things - i like your coloring a lot,And the line art,and how you did the scales on the fish,
the overall picture looks really nice.

Bad things - Well first thing I noticed,maybe because i'm looking at the deviation while writing this critique,

Is the ship,you colored it with so much white,
Did you tried to light(?) it?

- I suggest you color it with less white (example: Only one line of white in the red/blue barrier

Also the bubble,i think it should be more transparent

-I Think that you could of make the white transparent,making the ship look kind of the same behind the bubble,but with a little lighting

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:bulletyellow: Also,What is it on the Jellyfish's heads?
Is it like that in the movie too?

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Originality - Well,since this is fan art i can't critique on the design,but i like the overall picture and the overall picture looks pretty original ;p

So i will give you 3.5 stars

Technique - Your technique is great here,

I will give you 4 Stars.

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That's it~! Hope it helps you ;]
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jessieiii Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, that was a great critique.
The boat was kind of a last minute add in and it defintely is the worst part of the picture in my opinion, and with the bubble on the boat.
The boat isn't behind the bubble, the bubble is attatched to the boat. Just like in the movie, but I had no idea how to make it look like that.

And the orange bit on the heads of the jellyfish are just a pattern on the jellyfish and it was on the movie too. :P
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xReDMemory Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
thank you!;3

i see xD oh,well i think you should make the bubble squish into the ship,like when a bubble covers something,but i have no idea how it is in the movie xD

i see ;p
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