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Yuuto Korosawa by Todesanbeterin

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Hello,I'm here to give a very short critique about your work,hope its okay ;)

Good things - well first,i like how you drew the jacket,And the face.

But most importantly,Hes hair and eyes are red ;)
(I'm joking of course,its personal preference~)

Bad things - well first,He kind of looks like hes derping.

-Maybe try to make hes eyes to look at the same spot,even when looking high.

Also,the hair doesn't quite look like hair,

-maybe you should make all hes hair go one way,as the line art doesn't make it look that messy,
or make the line art go white in some part,its a trick i learned recently ;p

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The line art looks okay,but maybe pressure would help make it better?

that it will end smoothly.

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That's it!
Hope its okay ;)
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Todesanbeterin Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
First of all I'd like to thank you for your critique ^^

I'm glad the face and hoodie appeal to you. And the red hair and eyes :XD:

Yeah I know that's a problem of mine. making the eyes look at the same spot. Especially since it's the first time I've tried this drawing style ^^;
And drawing hair is hell to me :XD: It's the part for which took me the longest time, but still it looks awful @.@
I'll try that little trick, maybe it helps ^^

Thanks again for the critique/tips you gave me. I'll keep it in mind when I draw my next picture :)
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xReDMemory Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
np!;3

well,don't worry a lot of people sometimes have a problem with that,i just copy paste my eyes and flip it ,but if hair is on one then its hard for me also xD maybe,put a white shine on their eyes to one spot,that way even if the eyes look different the spot would indicate their looking there xD

cool!;3 i think all those brighter and darker streaks make it worse though,in my opinion. because to do that you need tons of concentration and make it right,i think you should not make them!or make them outside of the lineart and pointing to the direction the hair goes.
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Todesanbeterin Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
I shall try that... as soon as I can use my right hand again ^^
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xReDMemory Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
cool!Link me if you ever redraw this xD
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